My Personal Narrative
It was the night before the new adventure of my life, and my two best friends and I were outside on the porch soaking in the fresh air.
“It’s so nice out here; I don’ t want to go inside tonight,” Denaya complained.
“Well, you know…"
“No!” Denaya and I yelled before Margery would get an idea of impossibilities.
Margery replied “What? I was only gonna say that you guys should spend the night. It would only make sense. It’ s already nine somethin’, and the walk is around seven. And since my mom is taking us, it would only make sense.”
We knew it was risky business asking Mami and Papa if we could spend the night over, but we asked anyways. Especially since all three of us, knowing each other for a few years now, had never all spent the night together. Not even on birthdays! Around nine fifty, we decided we could wait no longer and that we had to ask if we wanted to stay. It took us a lot to muster up the courage, but it was well worth it.
“Yay!” we all exclaimed in the utmost excitement.
Now, there were only two obstacles that stood in our way. Denaya and I had to ask our parents. So, at the same time, Denaya called her dad and I called my mommy. Both of them said yes, but since it was so dark, Denaya and I set out on a journey. We had exactly thirty minutes given to us by our parents to walk from Margery’s house to Denaya’s house, to my house, and back to Margery’s house. So, at ten fifteen, the two of us embarked on our journey in a square. By ten thirty five, Denaya and I were walking in Margery’s house with bags in hand. We walked up her steps giggling with the wooden floors creaking. These wooden floors completed the feel of a fall day in Dominican Republic- a place we all knew. Often, Margery’s house was a resting place for the three of us to relax while we sorted our minds. The huge recliner chairs, the mango green walls, the wine, and the smell of Buela Dana’s Dominican dishes could make anyone feel at peace. But tonight, we were there to party. We planned to enjoy ourselves, even if it was just for a little while. We had a big day ahead of us. The following day, we were going to participate in a grand event. We were going to participate in the “Aids Walk“. Not only did it count for institutional credit, but it gave us a whole day for us three, even though there would be thousands of other people. Besides all the fun, we had a job to do when there. We were walking for a cure. Although I didn't quite get how walking could cure aids, I had it in my mind that on that specific day scientist would miraculously find the cure.
As we opened Margery's room door, she greeted us with a devious smile. We all knew that we were going to get into some real fun that night. Right away we went to enjoy some rice, beans, and chicken. After we ate our dinner, we kissed Mami and Papa goodnight, and went back into Margery's room. When we closed the door, we turned on some loud music, and began to throw the stuffed animals and layers of sheets onto the floor.
Margery's bed was a trampoline and we were touching the sky. At least we were touching the ceiling, until her mom came in and yelled "¡Sea callado ahora! Dormimos. ”. We all flopped down on the bouncy bed. Our options of fun were limited, but we had a plan. We simply watched television for a little while. We watched television until we were assured Mami and Papa were asleep. While those hours were passing we watched the clock go from twelve to one and on to two. When it was two a.m. we started our mischief. Did I say mischief? I meant, we started our FUN FUN FUN!
Since the neighbors were always giving Margery’s family trouble by not picking up their trash, we decided to repay them with some trash of our own. We slid Margery’s window all the way up until we had enough room to hatch our plan. We had enough room for all three of us to throw the stones we had collected from the broken path down below. Then, there was one. Then, there was another. And then, there was SILENCE. We were stunned quiet when we hit an old woman’s back door, and she yelled back at us. Because we were scared she might tell, we decided to close the window, and put that plan to rest. Instead, we decided to break out the cell phones.
I had people to call and discuss issues with, so I laid at one end of the bed. Denaya and Margery laid under the covers at the other end. I was extremely bored so I called someone named Mike. He was a really cool person and I was never bored while talking to him. We talked so much that night. We talked until about five in the morning. Normally, boys would run out of things to talk about, and I would lie and say I had to do something, but not with him. He was such a comedian that he kept my friends and I laughing the whole night.
Although my friends and I were on the phone with Mike, that didn’t stop us from stirring up other mischief. Of course, we played on peoples phones. It’s always funny to play on phones, but it’s even better when it’s someone you know. So, we all searched through our cell phones until we came upon people who we knew would argue back over the phone, and give us a laugh. First up was Ina. Ina was a friend of Margery’s from a summer program called PFL, and she attended Central with Margery as well. We all knew a good friend named Chris Yoak, and apparently Ina and Chris were talking to one another. We didn’t like the fact that they never met each other, and yet they were declaring their undying love for one another. So, we decided to call Ina with a little message. We called her cell phone, disguised our voices, and pretended to be Chris’ girlfriend. In all reality, we knew Chris didn’t have a girlfriend, but we were bored, and it seemed to be the most fun thing to do. All that night we called Ina and told her to leave Chris alone for good. But she turned her phone off after five calls, so we went hunting for our next victim. And alas, we came upon a name. This person had attitude for days, and we knew he wouldn’t take people playing on his cell phone lightly. So, until about four in the morning, we called non stop. He threatened, he cursed, and he promised the worse. But, he did not know who it was. We found it amusing how tough he was when he didn’t even know who was playing on his phone. Had he would have known it was us, he probably wouldn’t have said some of the things he said. Still, is was humorous.
We had planned to get to bed early, wake up at six, and leave the house for the walk by seven. But, of course nothing went this way. Instead, we woke up at seven thirty, and we didn’t leave until eight fifteen.
When we got there, to the art museum it was around eight forty five. There were thousands of people. Many of them we knew, and many more of them we did not. There were about ten high schools from Philadelphia there with their school banners held high. There was nothing but clean air dancing all around us. It could have been nine, or even nine thirty when the walk began. But before everyone started walking, a few people got on a platform, and spoke a few inspirational words to us all.
So when the walk did begin, my two best friends and I walked, and walked, and walked, and walked. We all thought that the walk was two miles. But, when it was eleven thirty, we figured that we thought wrong. In fact, the walk was ten miles long. It was all the way around Kelly Drive.
It was a perfect day for walking. The air was a cool breeze, and the sun was a warm glow. There was music all around us, merchants auctioning off their refreshments, and water at every bend. The river, or lake, was beautiful and glistening the whole way through. Every time we thought we made it to the finish line, we were wrong. It took us so long to complete the path. We hadn’t finished until one in the afternoon. We had NEVER walked that far in our life times. I almost never walk any where unless I absolutely have to, Margery barely ever leaves her house to walk any where, and Denaya doesn’t even walk to the bus stop at the corner of her block. This walk was a rude awakening for the three of us.
When we finally made it to the end, everyone was cheering us on, and telling us how great of a job we had done. But in my mind, I knew they wouldn’t be saying that if they were the ones who walked that path. We crawled our way over to a park across the street where we sat down. Even though the walk was HORRIBLE, sitting down hurt us as well. About fifteen minutes later, Mami came to pick us up. She laughed the whole way back to our second home as we complained.
When we got to Margery’s house, we all laid on the huge recliner chairs and watched King Kong. I thought it was longer, but Irene, Margery’s sister, said we were all asleep ten minutes in. We woke up around five o’clock, and we were invigorated. For hours on that Sunday evening, we laid back and thought about how we couldn’t have walked that far with anyone else. We are sisters.
It was the night before the new adventure of my life, and my two best friends and I were outside on the porch soaking in the fresh air.
“It’s so nice out here; I don’ t want to go inside tonight,” Denaya complained.
“Well, you know…"
“No!” Denaya and I yelled before Margery would get an idea of impossibilities.
Margery replied “What? I was only gonna say that you guys should spend the night. It would only make sense. It’ s already nine somethin’, and the walk is around seven. And since my mom is taking us, it would only make sense.”
We knew it was risky business asking Mami and Papa if we could spend the night over, but we asked anyways. Especially since all three of us, knowing each other for a few years now, had never all spent the night together. Not even on birthdays! Around nine fifty, we decided we could wait no longer and that we had to ask if we wanted to stay. It took us a lot to muster up the courage, but it was well worth it.
“Yay!” we all exclaimed in the utmost excitement.
Now, there were only two obstacles that stood in our way. Denaya and I had to ask our parents. So, at the same time, Denaya called her dad and I called my mommy. Both of them said yes, but since it was so dark, Denaya and I set out on a journey. We had exactly thirty minutes given to us by our parents to walk from Margery’s house to Denaya’s house, to my house, and back to Margery’s house. So, at ten fifteen, the two of us embarked on our journey in a square. By ten thirty five, Denaya and I were walking in Margery’s house with bags in hand. We walked up her steps giggling with the wooden floors creaking. These wooden floors completed the feel of a fall day in Dominican Republic- a place we all knew. Often, Margery’s house was a resting place for the three of us to relax while we sorted our minds. The huge recliner chairs, the mango green walls, the wine, and the smell of Buela Dana’s Dominican dishes could make anyone feel at peace. But tonight, we were there to party. We planned to enjoy ourselves, even if it was just for a little while. We had a big day ahead of us. The following day, we were going to participate in a grand event. We were going to participate in the “Aids Walk“. Not only did it count for institutional credit, but it gave us a whole day for us three, even though there would be thousands of other people. Besides all the fun, we had a job to do when there. We were walking for a cure. Although I didn't quite get how walking could cure aids, I had it in my mind that on that specific day scientist would miraculously find the cure.
As we opened Margery's room door, she greeted us with a devious smile. We all knew that we were going to get into some real fun that night. Right away we went to enjoy some rice, beans, and chicken. After we ate our dinner, we kissed Mami and Papa goodnight, and went back into Margery's room. When we closed the door, we turned on some loud music, and began to throw the stuffed animals and layers of sheets onto the floor.
Margery's bed was a trampoline and we were touching the sky. At least we were touching the ceiling, until her mom came in and yelled "¡Sea callado ahora! Dormimos. ”. We all flopped down on the bouncy bed. Our options of fun were limited, but we had a plan. We simply watched television for a little while. We watched television until we were assured Mami and Papa were asleep. While those hours were passing we watched the clock go from twelve to one and on to two. When it was two a.m. we started our mischief. Did I say mischief? I meant, we started our FUN FUN FUN!
Since the neighbors were always giving Margery’s family trouble by not picking up their trash, we decided to repay them with some trash of our own. We slid Margery’s window all the way up until we had enough room to hatch our plan. We had enough room for all three of us to throw the stones we had collected from the broken path down below. Then, there was one. Then, there was another. And then, there was SILENCE. We were stunned quiet when we hit an old woman’s back door, and she yelled back at us. Because we were scared she might tell, we decided to close the window, and put that plan to rest. Instead, we decided to break out the cell phones.
I had people to call and discuss issues with, so I laid at one end of the bed. Denaya and Margery laid under the covers at the other end. I was extremely bored so I called someone named Mike. He was a really cool person and I was never bored while talking to him. We talked so much that night. We talked until about five in the morning. Normally, boys would run out of things to talk about, and I would lie and say I had to do something, but not with him. He was such a comedian that he kept my friends and I laughing the whole night.
Although my friends and I were on the phone with Mike, that didn’t stop us from stirring up other mischief. Of course, we played on peoples phones. It’s always funny to play on phones, but it’s even better when it’s someone you know. So, we all searched through our cell phones until we came upon people who we knew would argue back over the phone, and give us a laugh. First up was Ina. Ina was a friend of Margery’s from a summer program called PFL, and she attended Central with Margery as well. We all knew a good friend named Chris Yoak, and apparently Ina and Chris were talking to one another. We didn’t like the fact that they never met each other, and yet they were declaring their undying love for one another. So, we decided to call Ina with a little message. We called her cell phone, disguised our voices, and pretended to be Chris’ girlfriend. In all reality, we knew Chris didn’t have a girlfriend, but we were bored, and it seemed to be the most fun thing to do. All that night we called Ina and told her to leave Chris alone for good. But she turned her phone off after five calls, so we went hunting for our next victim. And alas, we came upon a name. This person had attitude for days, and we knew he wouldn’t take people playing on his cell phone lightly. So, until about four in the morning, we called non stop. He threatened, he cursed, and he promised the worse. But, he did not know who it was. We found it amusing how tough he was when he didn’t even know who was playing on his phone. Had he would have known it was us, he probably wouldn’t have said some of the things he said. Still, is was humorous.
We had planned to get to bed early, wake up at six, and leave the house for the walk by seven. But, of course nothing went this way. Instead, we woke up at seven thirty, and we didn’t leave until eight fifteen.
When we got there, to the art museum it was around eight forty five. There were thousands of people. Many of them we knew, and many more of them we did not. There were about ten high schools from Philadelphia there with their school banners held high. There was nothing but clean air dancing all around us. It could have been nine, or even nine thirty when the walk began. But before everyone started walking, a few people got on a platform, and spoke a few inspirational words to us all.
So when the walk did begin, my two best friends and I walked, and walked, and walked, and walked. We all thought that the walk was two miles. But, when it was eleven thirty, we figured that we thought wrong. In fact, the walk was ten miles long. It was all the way around Kelly Drive.
It was a perfect day for walking. The air was a cool breeze, and the sun was a warm glow. There was music all around us, merchants auctioning off their refreshments, and water at every bend. The river, or lake, was beautiful and glistening the whole way through. Every time we thought we made it to the finish line, we were wrong. It took us so long to complete the path. We hadn’t finished until one in the afternoon. We had NEVER walked that far in our life times. I almost never walk any where unless I absolutely have to, Margery barely ever leaves her house to walk any where, and Denaya doesn’t even walk to the bus stop at the corner of her block. This walk was a rude awakening for the three of us.
When we finally made it to the end, everyone was cheering us on, and telling us how great of a job we had done. But in my mind, I knew they wouldn’t be saying that if they were the ones who walked that path. We crawled our way over to a park across the street where we sat down. Even though the walk was HORRIBLE, sitting down hurt us as well. About fifteen minutes later, Mami came to pick us up. She laughed the whole way back to our second home as we complained.
When we got to Margery’s house, we all laid on the huge recliner chairs and watched King Kong. I thought it was longer, but Irene, Margery’s sister, said we were all asleep ten minutes in. We woke up around five o’clock, and we were invigorated. For hours on that Sunday evening, we laid back and thought about how we couldn’t have walked that far with anyone else. We are sisters.
3 comments:
good story that had to be a long walk
good story and an interesting story
1. It does capture my attention because it talks about an adventure
2. I think the narrative will be about these three girls doing something adventurous that requires a long walk
3. This narrative is about how three girls had a magnificent time with one another the night before and during the Aids walk.
4. How you were describing the "fun" you guys were having that night before the walk and the figurative language from during and after the walk
5. Things I would like to know more about were about during the walk. What you guys did, what you guys talked about, stuff like that
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