She sits in the stall and cries. I text in the stall next to her. I know who it it from her feet. "They explode!" as the others say. I try not to make things worse, but I yell at her to, "Stop crying like a punk." She stiffens, but she knows it's the best thing anyone has ever done.
It ewas a hot day in these halls. From the windows in Mr. Gowans classroom I could see the bleeding trees. Math, science, reading, and all the other school life drigted pass me undisturbed. That was until I saw her. "Hideous!" I thought. Who was this thing? It smiled at me and waved. I felt my face turn up in disgust. I quickly turned my head and giggled at the thought of me and her possibly being friends. I mean, look at her. She had those exploding feet, scarred up unshaven legs, a too big sports bra, a shirt that had been worn too many times, and that face! I had to compose my laughter so no one would ask about my giggles.
Then, she sat next to me. Oh My God, she sat next to me. Why would she do that? Did her mind entertain the very thought of me actually conversing with her?
I was so embarrassed that she sat next to me. I pondered on what people would think. So there I sat, silently.
As I was embarrassed, I viewed myself as a coward. Why was I so afraid of what these other people thought? Why was I the one afraid?
Day after day she was tormented by these people who seemed so sweet. Most would say I was a sweet girl as well, but I secretly felt like I was one of them. Although the comments were mainly to myself, I was a bully. Even though I had tried so consciously not to be, I had subconsciously become one of them.
I saw this girl as strong. Probably the strongest girl I knew. It took more than just physical muscles, but emotional muscles too. It had to take alot to keep going like she has. People treated her like she wasn't even human. They practically tortured her. I never understood what it took for her to come here everyday. These people had no sympathy. She was strong.
As I stood in the bathroom stall texting, I heard a weep. I heard a few. I saw a tear drop on the floor. She was a barrior, and over time, these unsympathetic people broke her down. By breaking down her facade, the water from her hurt flooded though her eyes.
I knew who it was from her feet. They exploded like the others said. But for this time and in the future I promised, I forgot about the physical aspects of her. I did not see all the things that made her unpretty, but I saw all the things that made her weak. This is when I saw what made her truly ugly. I wanted her to be strong all the time. So, I showed her no sympathy towards her weakness as I said, "Stop crying like a punk!"
She stiffened, and I could hear her choke back her tears. She now knows that it is more important for her not to be weak, than not to be pretty. Those "pretty" people were weak. And to me, that made them uglier than her.
Tuesday, February 26, 2008
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5 comments:
luv it its the best in the class so far and u stuck to "one" story not "millions"
Like to me this is one the most deepest posts i ever read I cant event explain to you how i feel about this. All i can say alexis is good job know i mean know one could of done better than you did
1.The opening of Alexis's story definintley caught my attention immediatley because it was not in chronological order.I think the way it began quickly puts the reader in the story to understand what was going on.Alexis is a talented writer.Just as I did, any reader could appreciate that.
2.My favorite line from the story was when alexis says "it was more important for her not to be weak, than not to be pretty".That is a true fact that most girls or people in general fail to realize.
3. "I mean, look at her. She had those exploding feet, scarred up unshaven legs, a too big sports bra, a shirt that had been worn too many times, and that face! I had to compose my laughter so no one would ask about my giggles."
4.The section that could be improved through more sensory details was when she was crying in the end.I mean it doesn't need too much improvement but she could have said what the girl responded.
5.The ending wraps up the story in a good way because it ends with a moral and teaches a lesson.
6.As i said in #5; i liked how a lesson was somewhat learned.It was clever because it was unexpected.
awwwwwwwwwwwww.....thats so sad... i feel that girl...really i do
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