Thursday, February 7, 2008

The Call-Final Draft

It was about 2:00p.m. in the morning when the phone rung. My sister answer the phone. It was my sister at Xavier University of Louisiana. She was screaming "I just got jumped by a group of people." She also said "They are coming back to jump me again." My sister than ran the phone to my mom. My mom got on the phone and ask my sister " What is wrong." My sister told her the story and my mom freak out. My mom woke up my step dad and together they rusted down stairs. My mom tried to calm down my sister. By all the yelling that was going on, everyone was awake. When I rusted downstairs in my Betty Boop red slippers, gray, white and yellow ball shorts, a red t-shirt, and red scarf on my head, everyone was all over the place. I sat on the stairs not even half awake. I could smell my breath and it stinked and I still had crust in my eyes. When I ask what happen, my sister told me and I freak out. I started to say to myself "If my sister is hurt, I going to kill someone." I started to freak out. My sister tried to calm everyone down. She said "If we don't all calm down nothing is going to get fixed." By her saying that, everyone calm down. Everyone was quiet so I could hear what my mom was saying. She was asking my sister "What street are you on. My sister said "Canile street." When my mom told my step dad what street she was on, my step dad got on his cell phone. He was trying to get in contact with someone so they can help my sister. At the same time that was going on I still couldn't get why anyone would want to hurt my sister. She was a nice person who wouldn't hurt a soul, but I still couldn't get why anyone would want to hurt my sister. My mom told her " I have to get off the phone, but help is on the way." My sister told my mom " Ok" and they hung up. My step dad was still on the phone trying to get help. My mom called my sister back 10 minutes later on her cell phone. My sister answer in a calm voice. My mom asked her "Where are you now." My sister said " I'm at my cousin's house in the bed." My mom said "How could you be in bed when you just got jump by a group of people." My sister said "What are you talking about, I never got jumped, I was here all night." Right then and there we knew something fishy was going on. My mom then said "You just called us saying you got jumped by a group of people." My sister saided "I was here all night do you want to speak to our cousin." She said "Yes. "He got on the phone and my mom told him the story. He told my mom " She was here all day and that it couldn't have happened anyway because I lives in a gated community. He said "Its a big gate that surrounds the whole community." My mom said "Ok" and told him to "Give the phone back to Dominique." My sister got back on the phone and started talking to my mom. My mom told my sister "I'm so confused and i'm glad your ok. She told her" Good night" and they hung up. My mom told us "She is ok and she was at yall cousin house all day and she didn't get jumped." We were all confused but at the same time happy that she didn't get jumped. Then the idea popped in my head that someone was playing a jolk on us. My mom and everyone else was thinking it to. It is crazy because my sister is at our cousin house in the bed sleep and she never was jumped. We all thought we all had a bad night and it was time for bed. When we woke up around 8:00a.m. in the morning we all talked about what happened yesterday. We even thought of a couple suspects. Then we thought they wouldn't do a thing like that to us. We all just lift it alone. It was to much to handle. Even though we know some suspects, it all still remains a mystery till this day.

1 comment:

Michelle said...

1.I think that the opening statement is k because it did get my attention, i immediatley new it was about drama. 2. I think that the narrative will be about how family stand up for each other.
3. Someone calls ypur house acting like your sister and saying she got jumped, and instead you find out she was safe in her cousins house all day.
4. Things I liked best is how you kind of hyped it up.
5 Is anyone still trying to find out who pulled the prank?

Take a look at your grammar and spelling, but this narrative was good.